Writing Assignment

[horsecrazy333]

Critique my paragraph on snow. I think I am saying snowflakes too much. I am supposed to have 6 details so I need to add more. Any ideas on what to add? I don't expect you to know what to add because it is my paragraph but I am really stuck.

                               Every Little Snowflake
    My favorite thing to do in the snow is catch snowflakes. Wearing a dark colored coat, you can see each and every snowflake you catch. At least once every snowfall I go outside to catch the beautiful snowflakes. Each snowflake is unique and ornate. They all have their own detailed design.(I need 2-3 more details and a closing)

Thanks!

[pony lover]

well on the last "snow flake"""" u could put each one is ...

[horsecrazy333]

ok i will go change that in the word document right now that is a good idea.

[soccerfan611]

Every little snowflake

My favorite thing to do in the winter when the snowflakes start falling is catch them. Wearing my dark colored red coat, when ever I do catch one I like admiring it once in awhile. At least once every snowfall I go outside in the cold winter weather to catch the beautiful one of the kind snowflakes. Each no like another. It is amazing to see how little snowflakes like these can form heaps of snow. The snowflakes are what make winter a special touch of holidays.

I guess u have a start i hope it helps!!! srry i couldn't get to it sooner!

[horsecrazy333]

ok i used some of those ideas to make my final copy

[soccerfan611]

my writing sounds corny i spent like 5 minutes on it!! sorry!! but do can u post u're final copy on here??

[horsecrazy333]

maybe

[soccerfan611]

ok!!!!

[SpiritM]

Okey-dokey-diddly-pokey.

[soccerfan611]

LOL! that was quite random!

[horsecrazy]

but randoms good!  lol

XxX

[SpiritM]

Random, is a really, overused word.

Everything is random, right?

[horsecrazy]

true.. well in some cases!