What True Love Is Really About

[chesnuthillforever]

"Roxy!" "Roxy!" the worried family called. Their dog, Roxy, had turned up missing. She was a beautiful Dalmatian, with what was to them one of the most beautiful coats in the world. Each deep black spot sparkled and gleamed in the sun.
"Roxy!" Alexis, the youngest daughter, shouted worriedly. Roxy was everything to her. They played together. They learned together. They were mischievous together. Of course, they did this in varied ways. Roxy would trash the house; Alexis would prank her siblings. Both, of course, got into heaps of trouble. Roxy was her best friend. She was in a frenzy. Her very best friend had disappeared.
"Okay, I guess we'll go searching now." Alex, the father, said, heading towards the car, the keys jingling as the swung in his hand. The family got into the car and rode around the neighborhood, searching high and low for their pet.
"I miss Roxy." Maria, the oldest daughter, said worriedly. "I hope she's okay, too." Maria added. The family searched their neighborhood thoroughly. They had stopped at almost every house, but no one had seen Roxy. Every one else was not home, so they certainly couldn't provide any evidence of what had happened. Maria and Alexis sighed sadly. Tears shone brightly in their eyes. Their loyal dog, who meant everything in the world to them, had gone missing. What a terrible thought it was. If only they could do something to help. They put up posters. They posted pictures of her everywhere. Roxy, however, was still nowhere to be found. They needed her, and right now, she needed them. After all, how would she find food?  They had always looked out for each other. Roxy had always been protective. They sometimes referred to her as their guard dog. They tried to remember good times with her to help comfort them as they searched. It was getting too late. They could not possibly search anymore that night. It had gotten too dark. It was dark and the air was filled with rain clouds. Had the weather been better, they may have stayed out and searched with flashlights, but as it was it was simply no use.  They decided to go home. Just as they got inside, a huge thunderstorm began. Maria and Alexis sat at the window, sadly looking out. As they watched each drop of rain roll down the window, tears rolled down their cheeks as well, each in harmony. Maria and Alexis hugged. Everyone in the family worried. They all thought she was strong, but none of them were sure if she could survive. They decided to look at pictures of Roxy to keep them entertained. The sadness was a hard blow to them. They missed her. They didn't want to wait until the next day to search again, but they had to. Sighing, Maria and Alexis went to bed. They had dreams about Roxy. They were happy dreams. Roxy was back home safe and sound. If only it were true.    
The next morning, they ate breakfast gloomily. Then they went to search for Roxy again. Yet again, their beloved pet was nowhere to be found. They searched for what seemed like eons longer. They still did not find her. The family stopped for a lunch break, each enjoying their own sandwich. They went home and went to bed late that night.
On the third day, they searched again. Still, they found nothing. When the girls searched the park, they were deeply saddened, and reminded of their beloved pet. Dogs and owners seemed to be everywhere.
 The fourth day, Maria and Alexis were at soccer practice. They were playing very poor games. Their heartache took away their focus. Suddenly, they saw something moving in the distance. No. they thought, It can't be true. However, it was. Roxy was running towards them. The family reunited.
Maria and Alexis screamed simultaneously, "Roxy! I love you!" Their dog rushed towards them. They gave her gigantic hugs. Everything was back to normal. That is the Lexington’s story of what true love is all about.

P.S., I know none of you guys would steal this, but to people who don't have a membership and are just looking for stuff to steal, I submitted this to a publishing company, so if you did try to steal it, someone would notice that you stole it.

[SpiritM]

Wow, thats wonderful. Howlogn did it take you ?

I'm so impressed.

Show Christen it !!

[chesnuthillforever]

Not long. I think I wrote it in about a day. Then, I editted it the other day. I had known for a while it was cruddy on descriptions, so the other day, I added all of the descriptiveness, etc. i actually wrote it about two years ago, when my own dog disappeared, but it's mostly fiction. My dog never actually came back..
hey, I didn't think of that! I sure will.

[SpiritM]

Wowee ! Did you really send it to a publishing company ?? COOL !

[chesnuthillforever]

Yep. I did. They've published me in books with others kids before.

[SpiritM]

Really !!!

Whoah.

Did you get any royalties??

My Dad writes books/

[chesnuthillforever]

Yeah.
Nope.
Cool!!!!What type?

[horsecrazy]

that is reeally good!

[Zaza]

Wow I soooo want to get my stories published too ! lol

But anyway, your story is pretty good. Can I make few comments ?

Well, I personnally find that your descriptive way is good, but you use 'sadly', 'worried' etc too often. You should try to find other words with the same meaning.

Also, try to use other names than 'they', 'they, 'they'. It's nice when you don't have the same words repeating each other.

But anyway ...  yeah that's all I think !

[chesnuthillforever]

Hey guys! Guess what?  I have a letter from the publishing company, and they're publishing it!

[horsecrazy]

that is ABSOLUTLY well entruly!, UBER W-O-N-D-E-R-F-U-L-L!

i may just buy it 


haha




thats great news!

[clooneyfan]

AWESOME!
when will it be published?

[chesnuthillforever]

^Well, the books are supposed to come out this month some time.

[soccerfan611]

Hey guys! Guess what?  I have a letter from the publishing company, and they're publishing it!

omg amazing! u're really great theres another writer that comes on here cem? idk do u no her?? she writes great stories too i tired to convince to publish it but she doenst listen to me haha anyways thats great wat book will it b on?? oh and dont forget about us when u become famous hahah

[chesnuthillforever]

Yeah, I know her. The Anthology of Short Stories for Yougn Americans. I'm not sure what edition, though. They have tons of editions. DOn't jump ahead of yourself, now.